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2022-11-04 15:26:54
Astra, Part 1

She isn't the first consort of King Muse, or even the second or third. In fact, Muse already had several consorts when he Met Astra, yet she is still his Queen and the love of his life. They met by accident locking eyes at a watering hole and his heart skipped a beat. He broke eye contact to turn away from her only when he heard a noise behind him and when he looked back, she was gone.
He looked for her until nightfall and then went home, but the next day when he woke up, she was still all he could think about. He went out to look for her again every day after that until finally he found her outside of a cave.
He discovered she felt the same way about him, but she wouldn't come back to the Pride with him. Every day he came to see her and they fell more in love, yet she would never come with him, and went night came they went their separate ways night after night.
One day, he brought the rest of the pride to meet her and she bonded with another one of the lionesses. Eventually Astra confided a secret in her.
When Muse got back home with his pride, Astra still back at her cave of course, the other lioness told Muse the truth. We don't yet know if she had an ulterior motive for this, but either way, Muse was beside himself with sadness. He spent the next several days sulking and didn't go back to see Astra.
Finally, the other lioness said to him "It doesn't have to be this way, you can bring them home. No one has to know the truth. We will figure it out." Again, her motives weren't clear, but it was all Muse needed to hear. He was so in love with Astra and all he wanted was to finally bring her home.
Early the next morning, before the sun had even risen, Muse returned to Astra's cave where he found her sitting outside looking worried.
"I know the truth, I want you all to come back with me and join the pride." he told her. They discussed how things would have to be for this to work out and then Astra hesitantly led Muse inside the cave where he could see three sleeping cubs. His heart sank. They were the most beautiful cubs he had ever seen which meant that if he brought them home and presented them as his own, they would be eventually be able to challenge him for his place as king. How would he keep his promise to Astra to not kill them and to raise them as his own knowing they were more beautiful than his own cubs? Was he really willing to risk his bloodlines place as heir to the throne for Astra? He truly loved her but this went against everything he was raised to believe in..


Astra, Part. 2

“Remember,” Muse said, looking down at the cubs with concern, “I will not harm them, but they must never challenge me. Thats the deal”

Astra shook her head silently in agreement, hoping she was making the right choice. She knew how hard it would be to raise three cubs on her own without the protection of a pride. She would have to leave the cubs alone to go off hunting and she didn’t know how long she could keep that up. Seeing the way Muse looked at her three precious children gave her little reassurance.
But she wanted to go with him, and what alternative did she have? She couldn’t go back to the pride she fled from.
Her heart sank even more as she thought back to her pride.
She had fled from there to keep her cubs safe in the first place. If they found her, they’d all be killed. She needed the protection of Muse’s pride. She was going back with him.

a few disclaimers:
1. I've only been on Lioden a week
2. I've never written anything in my life & just did this for fun :)

with that in mind id love to have so feedback, just please don't come at me too hard lol



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Edited on 04/11/22 @ 15:34:15 by Dream (#386780)

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2022-11-11 22:44:09
I think it's wonderful! Sure there are a few words that could be replaced with stronger ones. but I adore this story and I want to know what happens next!



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2022-11-14 13:17:29
Do you mind if I share my story here too?



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Dream (#386780)

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2022-11-14 20:43:01
You can :)



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2022-11-15 08:37:21
Brave Fang looked out over his pride from the Willow Shades, a large tree that has grown through the rocks and shades a large area of stones. It's been a few months since he's been crowned king by his father, Swift Blaze. Brave had always been so confident in his ability to lead this pride as a young cub. But now that his was here, sitting on the throne, he was constantly worried over everything. A built, elderly, dappled lioness climbed the rocks to his side, grunting as she flopped down next to him. Brave pressed his head to hers with a purr, "Hey, Death Frost." he cooed. Death let out a raspy huff of amusement, "My son, you are my cub! You can still call me mother," she purred before batting his shoulder with her paw fast and hard, "Or does calling me such make you feel less "king-ly"..?" she sneered with a growl of laughter. Brave chuckled softly, his shoulder aching slightly from the blow he received from his mother. Death sighed and looked out, "You've been troubled lately, my cub," she turned her wrinkled face back to him, her purple eyes looked like the twilight sky above them just far more intense and focused, "I know you're worried about the pride, but there's more going on. Tell me. Do not lie either." she stated firmly.Brave huffed as he looked back to his pride. He fixed his eyes on a lioness, covered in scars, blind in one eye. Death let out a low rumble of realization, "Ah, I see. Silver Shine-"
"Is almost unable to hunt! The Hyenas have tried to finish her more than once. I-"
Death nipped his ear, "Hush up, Brave! Don't interrupt me," she hissed, "Brave Fang, do you REALLY think Silver is defenceless? That lioness is as scared as she is strong and brave. Don't fret over her so much." she purred, twining her tail with his. The comfort and reassurance of his mother allowed Brave to loosen up and relax, "I suppose you're right." he agreed, laying his head on his paws. What would he do without his mother?



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2022-11-19 10:46:51
Love it <3



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2022-11-19 14:34:24
Thank you!



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