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My friend gave me this prompt to write about to stave off the Spring Break boredom and it was just too interesting to pass up. I forged ahead with the first little prologue and I'm looking for some feedback. I'm not 100% sure where to go with it so some plot suggestions would be great!


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The darkness that engulfed me was suffocating, it surrounded me and seemed to pull me deeper into the abyss I was floating in. With great effort I lifted my hand in front of my face, distressed when I couldn’t see it. As I attempted to regain my spatial awareness I recognized the sense of weightlessness, I was floating in apparent nothingness I couldn’t sense anything around me. The silence was deafening and just as the panic was setting in I noticed the pitch black that had once surrounded me was now a dull grey. With each passing second my surroundings came into view, soon I was submerged in a calming blue ambiance. I once again lifted my hand in front of my face, pleased to find that I could make out every detail of my hand from my knuckles to the bright coral fingernail polish on my nails.

Just as I was going to continue my examination a movement out of the corner of my eye caught my attention. I turned to see what it was and did a double take, surely my mind was playing tricks on me. My eyes bugged out as I watched a pair of sea lions twist and twirl around me, their curiosity piqued when they saw me gawking at them. As they swam near I heard a faint buzzing in the back of my head, a steady hum of nonsense. The braver of the two stuck its nose in my face for a closer look, jumped back and startled them. They swam away in a hurry, glancing back occasionally to check to make sure I wasn’t in pursuit. Before I could actually assess what has transpired a melodious voice called to me.

“Excuse me, are you the new girl?” I frantically turned to see who the owner of the voice was, desperate for answers as to where I was and what was going on. My eyes rested on a distant figure floating towards me and I squinted to try and make it out. As the mass got closer and realization dawned on me I was slapped with a wave of shock.

“Hello there! Sorry I’m so late, there was a mix up with the shift change and I-never mind,” The girl waved her hand flippantly, oblivious to my silent awe. “I’m Hannah, here to help you with all of your questions and issues you might have.” She stuck out a hand expectantly. It took all of my willpower to ignore the giant elephant in the room and greet her like a normal human being.

“Nasrin, Rin for short.” I gingerly took her hand, trying not to show my fear. An awkward silence fell over us and I looked all around the space Hannah occupied, making a point not to look directly at her.

“Hm, you are the most relaxed tyro I’ve ever had. Usually new merfolk have a ton of questions!” Her cheery demeanor and bright green eyes almost threw me off. It took me a second to process exactly what she said but once I did I suddenly felt light headed and queasy.

“M-merfolk?” My voice came out funny and garbled and I chalked it up to lack of use.

“Yep, that’s the politically correct term for us. Though mermaid and merman is acceptable.” Hannah shot me a brilliant smile, her canines seeming to be a bit sharper than necessary.

“Us? Oh I’m not a…” My protest died on my tongue as I glanced down at my torso for the first time since I regained consciousness. I took in the long scaly tail that extended from my midsection. The inky, black, iridescent scales that covered the-my tail were mesmerizing, shimmering in the refracting light. It was then that I became hyper aware of my surroundings, I was underwater, there was no way I could be breathing. I clutched at my throat frantically as I took in gulps of water, Hannah reached forward and pulled my hands away.

“That’s more like it. No worries, you are indeed able to breathe underwater.” She moved my hands across my neck and I felt the fine gills there, barely noticeable unless I rubbed against the grain. I took a deep breath, amazed at how they strained a bit when I exhaled. I tried to take in water with my new gills and found my lungs getting a health dose of water. I coughed violently, which was a bit awkward underwater, and Hannah thumped me on the back.

“Don’t do that, you’ll drown.” She chided me with a wag of her finger. I tilted my head to the side in a silent question. “Think like a shark, take in water through your mouth or nose and out through your gills, don’t ever go in reverse. That’ll take in water to your lungs and you’ll suffocate.”

I nodded numbly as I glanced back down at my tail, I gingerly ran my hands along what was once my thighs. Surprised at the smoothness I found it was then that I noticed the white spots along the side of my tail that became more prominent as they reached my fin which had a white stripe running along the edge.

“Beautiful isn’t it? I’ll admit I’ve yet to see one like yours, if I had to guess I’d say you’ve got some angelfish in ya,” She examined my fin with an intense curiosity, “Where are you from?”

“Well I was born in Maine but my mother is from Brazil and my father is from Azerbaijan.” I gave her the simplified version, I was a textbook mutt. My mother’s heritage was a hodgepodge of ethnicities but her most dominate one and the one she identified with the most was Brazilian.

“Azerbaijani huh? That explains the exotic pigment. Remarkable.” She muttered to herself as she continued to examine my tail. I took the time to glance at her tail and was enthralled with the muddled speckles that adorned her mossy green tail. The reds and browns mixed together pleasantly with the green from the top of her hips all the way down to her heart shaped tail. It looked like one of those splatter paintings by that abstract artist that my 10th grade art teacher was obsessed with. I was so lost in trying to remember the painter’s name that I almost missed Hannah’s question.

“So are you ready to get started on our crash course to merfolk life?” She flashed me another brilliant smile.

“I guess I don’t really have a choice huh?” I managed a weak smile.

“Not really.” Hannah giggled as she took my hand and pulled me along. I mimicked her movements and found it surprisingly difficult to maneuver with my new gear. My tail flipped and propelled me forward at uneven intervals and with varying power it was hard to gauge how hard I need to flick my tail to maintain a steady pace. We had just managed to reach what looked like the ruined outskirts of a city when a glaring question popped into my head.

“So how did I end up here? I mean I definitely wasn’t born a mermaid, erm person. And I don’t remember signing up to be one...” I trailed off, hoping Hannah had an answer for me. She looked back over her shoulder at me with a quizzical expression.

“Oh, I thought you were aware,” Her face softened into a look of pity, “You died, Rin.”

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So there you have it folks, basically the prompt is that there is a select few who, when they die, become mermaids and live out a 'second life' under the sea. I was thinking of having the usual issues of Rin trying to come to terms with her being 'reborn' into a mermaid and adhering to the rules of the merpeople. But I need a bigger issue that she needs to overcome other than the typical adjustment period.

Also please excuse any mistakes, I've yet to proofread it. CX




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Haha well I guess the question now is "will I continue?". My muse is a fickle, fickle being so hopefully they won't skip out on me. I'm trying to expel out as much as I can right now. X3



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Commenting to follow! Please, keep this up! I love it!!



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Continue, this is great!



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Anticipate a small pause in updates as I'm currently in Chicago for a few days sightseeing and doing other generic touristy stuff. X3



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Alright, I've got tons of free time today so expect an update later today! -gobbles up deep dish pizza-



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An update! Just for you!

Note: Southerners are NOT bred to handle copious amounts of Chicago style hot dogs and deep dish pizza. My poor digestive tract. CX

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When we finally arrived at The Chasam I instantly regretted not coming down here sooner. I could see why some were apprehensive about coming down here, before you actually reached The Chasam you had to swim down about 200 feet in the pitch blackness that the ocean is so famous for. And boy was it dark, before the dive Ji-ji gathered my wrist in a death grip warning me that if I slipped from her grasp to not panic and just swim down. Of course just as visibility was arriving at zero I lost Ji-ji, my heart rate soared as a feeling of intense loneliness enveloped me. It took me about 30 seconds to calm myself down enough to remember Ji-ji’s advice. While I was sure the journey only took a couple of minutes it fell like millenia gliding through the darkness. But when I arrived at the Chasam that frightening journey felt like a small price to pay for the sight before me.

If I had to compare the Chasam to anything in the mortal world I’d say it was a cross between a bazaar and a busy trade harbor. There were all sorts of sea creatures flitting about, mythical and earthly. Conversing and trading with each other, in a sort of controlled chaos. I narrowly avoided a collision with a pair of arguing tiger sharks, only to bump into a grumpy looking lionfish mermaid. Before I could comment on the utter beauty of the Chasam Ji-ji was already toting me over to a stall on the far side of the area, Zee and Drew following close behind.

“Ah! Rin come over and say hello to AJ! He’s been dying to meet you, we’ve chatted you up so much.” I could only follow in stunned silence as we neared a stall that seemed to be selling silver dollars. I recognized a couple familiar faces and a smile appeared on my face.

“Hey Hannah, Cal. Funny running into you here.” I playfully tugged at Hannah’s braid.

“Not really. We’re on duty.” Cal’s smart remark had me rolling my eyes in exasperation.

“It’s an expression Cal. I know you two are on duty you buffoon.” I grouched. As Cal flipped me the bird a head popped up from under the counter. I stifled a yelp as I stared into curious dark brown eyes. As the mermaid emerged I examined his face further, he had dark skin and dark hair that complimented the pale scales that covered his tail.

“So this is the fabled Nasrin I’ve heard soo much about?” His tone was light and his voice was pleasant. His dazzling smile showed off two rows of perfect pearly white teeth and set me at ease.

“Good things I hope.” I shot a glare or two at my friends for emphasis.

“The best. I’m Ajit Desai, and I must say I’m pleased to make your acquaintance. His smile reached his warm brown eyes and I couldn’t help but appreciate his elegant features. Aj’s nose was straight and refined, which went well with his hollowed cheeks. He had those pouty lips one usually associates with Abercrombie models and his jawline was so sharp I was sure I’d cut myself on it if I wasn’t careful. It was only when Zee subtly elbowed me that I realized I was starting.

“Sadly I can’t say I’ve heard much about you.” I realized too late how that sounded and I quickly tried to correct any damage I’d done. “I-I mean, it’s just that…”

“No worries. I know what you mean.” Aj chuckled and I wanted to smack my head against the sharp edge of the counter a few times.

Aj and I chatted for a while, the rest of the gang had dispersed to do some shopping or continue their duties. I found out that Aj was actually selling compact mirrors made out of silver dollars and when he wasn’t working at the Chasam he worked on restoring capsized ships. After my not too subtle attempt to find out how he ended up in this afterlife Aj indulged me. He was a member of the Indian National Army in British India and was taken as a PoW of the Japanese army during the Battle of Singapore. While he was born in Bombay he was orphaned at a young age and adopted by a British family. Though he grew up in London he was eager to get back to his roots and do something for his birth country so he joined the army. That accounted for his enchanting Received Pronunciation accent. I was just getting into my mottled heritage when Cal returned.

“My shift’s ended and Zee is making me escort you to see Solomon about your visions.” Cal stared at me, indifferent to the fact that he had interrupted my rather interesting conversation with Aj. With a stern glare at Cal I said my farewells to Aj with a promise to continue this chat at a later date. As I followed Cal out of the Chasam I wondered who Solomon was and how he could possibly help with the visions I’d been having. They had been increasing in intensity as of late and now it wasn’t uncommon for me come out of it short of breath and nauseous. Hannah warned me that they would probably get increasingly worse unless I sought help from Solomon on how to fix my ‘inner turmoil’. Once our surroundings became darker Cal reached for my hand and spared a quick glance to gauge my feelings. I hoped my face didn’t show how frightened I was to go back through the darkness but I was glad that Cal was with me. He sent out this constant wave of calmness and security I couldn’t quite pinpoint why I felt so at ease around Calvin but I was a pleasant feeling. This time my hand held steadfast through the darkness and soon we were back at the edge of the city.

Cal released my hand and analyzed my current disposition. His jean blue eyes held mine for a second before he continued on. I was slightly surprised when I realized we were headed to the surface, in the direction of Otter’s Grove and the Northern tide pool. When we broke the surface I was smacked in the face with a fish head, Cal stifled a laugh and scolded the young otters that had committed the offense. I followed Cal to a group of sunbathing otters, the largest of the group sat up to greet us.

“Calvin Quebedeaux! It’s been awhile hasn’t it? You got a lobstah for me?” Solomon was a slightly overweight North American river otter who was missing his left eye and part of his tail. He spoke with a thick northern accent that reminded me of the inhabitants of my former town in Maine.

“No, not this time Solly. You should lay off those crustaceans.” Cal poked his pudgy belly and leaned on the rock Solomon was laying on.

“Yeah, what’da you know? All you ever ate when you were alive was bah-be-cue and catfish. You have no idea what good lobstah straight outta Bah Habah tastes like.” Solomon waved a dismissive webbed paw and fixed me with his beady eyes. “Who’s the broad?”

“This is Nasrin. She needs help with her past-life visions.” As soon as Cal finished the explanation Solomon got serious and went straight to work. He climbed all over me, poking and prodding I was just about to question his qualifications when he hopped back on the rock.

“You are one jaded lady. You gotta lot of unfinished business up here. Yeesh, kids these days, they don’t know how to live in moderation. Always with the dramatics, gotta have things the hard way. Look hon I’ll be honest I don’t think you’ll get rid of this by my usual methods. I’m afraid I can’t help ya, my only advice it to embrace your visions and come back when you’ve got a clearer picture on your past. I wish yous guys all the luck though, sorry I couldn’t help more.” With that Solly splashed back into the water, probably to seek out more ‘lobstahs’, and left me with feeling deflated and a little nauseous.




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A (Short) Update!

This is just a flashback Rin had after her convo with Solly the Otter. This reveals exactly how she found herself in that troubling situation that lead to her untimely death

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My parents had been gone for the past week and a half traipsing around Brazil and doing God knows what. I was house sitting for them and glad to be out of that shoebox I called a dorm, even if that meant I had to watch their massive beast they had the nerve to call a dog. I was still a bit bitter at my parents for not taking me along, I was finally old enough to participate in the fun that comes with Carnival but they insisted that I couldn’t afford to take even a week off of school to join them. And while they were probably right I would never admit it. I decided the least I could do was help myself to their liquor cabinet, despite the fact that I was at least 8 months shy of the legal drinking age. After all I couldn’t get into too much trouble getting buzzed in my own house right? I was so painfully wrong.

It was close to midnight and I was half way through a bottle of merlot when the quiet chuffing of Rizzo, my parent’s massive doberman, reached my ears. I sat up slowly and glared at her over the back of the couch.

“Shut up Riz, it’s just the neighbor’s cat.” I turned to face the T.V. smiling at the antics of the Real Housewives of God Knows Where cast. Rizzo continued to chuff and soon a menacing snarl left her throat, I immediately recognized the change in her aggression level. I launched myself from the couch, setting the wine glass I was nursing back on the coffee table. Rizzo crept towards the back door, growling a warning to whoever was on the other side. My heart was in my throat as I peered out the window of the dutch door. I flicked on the light that illuminated our modest backyard, when I saw no one I rolled my eyes and sent another glare towards Rizzo.

“There’s no one out there you crazy bitch.” I chuckled at my small pun and when Rizzo refused to cease her growling I wrenched open the top of the dutch door. I barely had time to yell ‘Look’ before Rizzo was up and over the still closed, bottom half. I watched her sprint across the yard and my annoyance turned to horror as I saw that the back gate was open. I quite ‘shit’ left my mouth before I was fumbling to open the other half of the door silently cursing the cruel creators of such a useless door. By the time I had reached the back gate Rizzo was already out of the yard and making a beeline down the empty street. I yelled after her but Rizzo was having none of it. She was hell bent on chasing down whatever imaginary being she had created in her mind. I had no choice but to run after her.

It had been a good ten minutes when I got the eerie feeling that someone was following me. I casually glanced over my shoulder and panic begin to set in as I noticed an unfamiliar man a few feet behind me. I spun around to confront him, regretting leaving the house without something to protect myself. While the guy didn’t look like your typical Axe Murderer he didn’t exactly look like some harmless resident. And he was holding something behind his back, not wanting to find out what it was I made to leave.

“Was that dog that just ran by yours?” His voice was husky and made the hairs on the back of my neck stand up.

“Uh, yeah. And no offense but the longer I stand here talking to you, the farther away she gets.” With that I turned and walked in the direction I saw Rizzo run off to. My heart leapt up into my throat when I heard the heavy footfalls of the semi-creepy guy behind me. He was making no effort to conceal the fact that he was following me. I sped up to a half jog as I cut between two houses and onto the neighboring street. By this time I was running full out and it didn’t seem as if semi-creepy guy (who had since been promoted to full-on creepy guy) had stopped chasing me. At this point all thoughts of finding Riz were out the window, I was now trying to find out how I would get out of this mess I’d managed to get into.




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This is the best unpublushed story I have ever read! :):):):):)



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Ask and ye shall receive!

So sorry for the looong delay, I had to finish up the school year and finals had caused my muse to go into hibernation. After several attempts I finally got back in his good graces and I've not got a pretty important update for y'all.

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“-but that’s no reason for him to go all “Male Chauvinistic Pig” on me.” Zee finished her complaint with a pout. I was lucky in that no one noticed my Previous Life Flashback (PLF) episode because they were all engrossed in Zee’s latest boy trouble tale. Even though I only caught the last tidbit of the story I could pretty accurately guess the gist of it. ‘Zee likes Cute Boy. Cute Boy likes Zee. Zee dates Cute Boy for awhile until she comes across Cuter Boy. Zee then drops Cute Boy like a sack of potatoes. Cute Boy gets upset and causes a scene.’ In my time down here Zee had become like a sister to me but even I had to admit that she had a problem with the opposite sex. She just couldn’t say no. She was attractive by anyone’s standards so suffice to say she was frequently getting offers for dates and had a hard time turning down a handsome face.

“Wait are you and Drew on or off. I can never keep up.” Ji-ji had a puzzled look on her face as she struggled to decided which it was.

“Off.”

“On.”

Hannah and I had both replied at the same time. Though we didn’t have the same answer. We both looked at each other in confusion, going through the recent developments in Drew and Zee’s extremely complicated relationship. I couldn’t put a number on the times that Zee and Drew had broken up in the time I’d been here. Initially I was shocked to find out they had any sort of relationship, but Hannah informed me that they had a loose thing going ever since Zee started her second life. I quickly did the math and realized that was almost 50 years ago. At first I was impressed at how they managed to stay together that long but then again in the mermaid world there are only so many fish in the sea.

“Okay it doesn’t matter if we are on or off. What matters is that he has no right to dictate who I talk to.” Zee crossed her arms and took to silently brooding. It was at this time that I noticed Cal had been staring at me since I’d come out of my PLF. I decided to pointedly ignore him and instead examined my tail. Before I could suggested another sunbathing trip Cal cleared his throat.

“Rin, before you dash off to primp in the afternoon sun I think you should come with me.” His deep rumbling voice and slight southern drawl held a bit of trepidation.

“My-my Mr. Quebedeax this is quite an improper proposal. A young lady should never be in the company of a gentlemen without proper supervision.” I put my on my best southern belle accent and fanned myself in mock shock.

“I assure you my intentions are pure. Now come on.” Cal indulged me as he grabbed my arm and tugged. I shrugged and followed him, glancing back at the others.

Once again I found myself blindly following Cal into who knows where. I half hoped one of the others would offer to join us due to the slight uneasy feeling that was settling in the pit of my stomach. That feeling only increased as I was once again submerged into complete darkness, the vast emptiness that Cal dragged me through heald an air of despair. My limbs grew heavy and it wasn’t long before I felt as though we were swimming through sludge. Cal trudged on, and I struggled to keep up, my tail working overtime to avoid sinking in the viscous water. It seemed like ages before we encountered a dim light in front of a cave entrance. I stopped short, a wave of uneasiness descending upon me. Something awful was in there and I had no intention of finding out exactly what it was.

“Trust me.” Was all Cal said as he made to grab my hand. I pulled back a bit but after a few seconds of indecisiveness I motioned for him to go on.

The lighting inside the cave was poor at best and my eyes strained to see even a few feet in front of me. When my eyex finally adjusted I was shocked at the sight before me. There were a few dozen merfolk huddled in groups around the cave. Most were ghastly looking, emaciated and gnarled. Their skin was a sickening gray color and was stretched thin over bones, sunken eyes roamed around and struggled to focus on anything for long. Their mouths gaped open and closed constantly, reminding me of goldfish, it would have been comical if not for the hollow gasping that escaped every time their mouths opened. Their tails were twisted and thin, the scales flaking off to reveal patches of ashen flesh. A tingling sensation ran along my spine as I gazed in fascination at these poor creatures.

“These are Floaters. The ones who can’t get rid of their past lives and live in a suspended version of reality.” Cal shooed away a few who had come close to examine the foreign beings.

“Gosh Cal you sure have a strange idea of a first date.” I gave a short chuckle at my tasteless joke and Cal’s left eye twitched in annoyance.

“Rin, this could be you in a few months if you don’t deal with your past life problems.” The stern look Cal was giving was enough to sober me up.

“Well, what the hell do I do? I don’t even know what ‘problems’ I had,” I threw up my hands in frustration which startled a few nearby Floaters, “I mean my life wasn’t perfect or anything but I was in a good place. I mean I had racked up a fair amount of student loans but I doubt that the source of my issues.”

“Calm down Rin, I think I know what might help.” He swam towards the back of the massive cave and I followed reluctantly. Cal pushed his way through a large gathering of Floaters in the center of the group was a rather plump looking mermaid who looked quite out of place among the greyed, gaunt Floaters. She was dressed like a fortune teller with a flowy peasant shirt and colorful scarf tied around her head of curly black hair. She had piercing amber eyes that snapped towards me and Cal when we broke through the crowd.

“Ahh Calvin, so nice of you to visit me. It’s been too long. Who’s your friend?” She pointed to the two plush cushions that were placed across the small, squat table in front of her. It was then that I noticed a giant crystal ball on a stand. I had to bit my tongue to keep from laughing at the painfully cliche scene in front of me. I couldn’t believe Cal took me to a freaking fortune teller, how was this woman supposed to help me with my visions?

“This is Nasrin. Rin, this is Adalet, she’s a Seer.” Cal noded to Adalet and the two of us exchanged pleasantries. She then asked for my hand and I reluctantly gave it to her. While she was examining my ‘life lines’ I took the time to examine the crystal ball. There was some sort of smoke inside of it that was continuously swirling around, I almost yelped when I saw an image projected on it. Before I could hone in on what it was the smoke shifted again, only to produce another image. This happened several times before a familiar scene was revealed.

“Th-that’s my mom!” I yanked my hand away and pressed both my palms against the smooth glass, my face mere centimeters away from the crystal ball. I studied the scene and my stomach clenched when I realized this was present day footage of my parents.

“Hm, interesting,” Adalet muttered to herself as she reached for my hand again. “Now darling if you’d hold still I’ll be able to give you a better projection. Just don’t be alarmed by the immersive experience. It’s also important that you don’t resist, this may become uncomfortable and if it does all you have to do is call out.” I nodded dumbly as I continued to stare at the crystal. It wasn’t long before my surroundings started to blur around the edges. Before I knew it was I back in my living room watching my mother chat on the phone.

“Yes, thank you so much Lisa. I’m sure you’ll do a great job.” The cheeriness in her voice was a stark contrast to the grimace on her face. She slammed the phone back on the receiver and shouted for my father. He popped his head in the doorway from his place in the kitchen.

“Mariana my darling what is it?” My dad went back to whatever he was doing in the kitchen, his tone light.

“It looks like Lisa will be doing the Spring gala this year. That little vulture took no time swooping in and snatching it from me. She knows that’s my event!”

“Maria, calm down. Do you really think you could handle that?” The incredulous look my mother threw in the general direction of my dad sent a flash of familiarity through me.

“Yes. I do. And you do too. I mean it hasn’t even been a month and already Lisa is taking over my events.” She crossed her arms in annoyance. It was then that my dad came from the kitchen, carrying a plate with a couple paninis on it. He set them on the coffee table before pulling my mom into a hug.

“Well look at it this way, she’ll put on a mediocre event, everyone will realized once again that you are superior in your event planning, and Lisa won’t bother to take an event from your ever again.” My mother offered a small satisfactory smile. I could tell she was imagining the gossip that would arise from the subpar event Lisa would plan.

Mariana Samedov was a middle aged mother of one. Though upon first glance you’d never guess it. She was tall and lithe with curves in all the right places, her bronzes skin was flawless and her complexion was blemish free. She had a look that most would describe as ‘Mediterranean’ with her pale green eyes and dark wavy hair. Her heart shaped face and angular cheekbones in combination with her sharp nose gave the impression of manufactured beauty. When asked, she deny it but I knew my mother did have some work done, nothing major just a nose job. She told me she got it when she thought she had a future with modeling, before she realized that she wasn’t that good at taking direction and had a slight problem with authority. So she bounced around from job to job until she met my father. Then motherhood was her profession for a while until she found a career that she excelled at. Now she was the most sought after event planner in Maine. I smiled at the memory of late nights spent helping my mom with last minute preparations and listening in on the drama of Maine’s socialites.

I had always admired my mother and strived to one day be as strong and talented as she was. I was snapped out of my fond memories by the bane of my existence, or past existence. The loud barking of my least favorite canine broke the silence. Rizzo came bounding in the room, skidding to a halt in front of my mother. She let out a whine and pawed at my father’s knee.

“Riz, you just went out.” He complained around a mouthful of food. Rizzo wouldn’t let that fact deter her, she gave another sharp bark. I was surprised that they managed to find the dumb beast after her great escape that night. Yet, here she was begging to be let out to do her business.

“I’ll take her out Javi.” My mom sprung up from the couch and headed for the door. Rizzo hot on her tail. I opted against following them, not wanting to watch Rizzo perform her bathroom ritual. I instead opted to study my dad, frowning when I noticed he looked a bit on the thin side. I could only assume the reason behind his recent weight loss and a wave of guilt washed over me. My dad was, what I would call, an accomplish man. He was born in Ganja, Azerbaijan but he and his family moved to America when he was 4 years old. He went through the usual struggles that an immigrant faces growing up in a foreign place but he managed to make it through law school and started his own firm with his college roommate. His kind face and contagious smile lead many to believe he was a poor lawyer but in fact Javid Samedov was a tenacious opponent in the court room. I had him to thank for my honey brown eyes and thick dark hair, I’ve also been told I had my dad’s smile and though I couldn’t really see it I took everyone else’s word for it.

My dad had his ‘mid-life crisis’ last year. He quit his job at the firm, shirking his clients off on my cousin, and opened up a restaraunt. I had known he had enjoyed cooking and thought he was a wonderful chef but I had always thought it was just a casual hobby. My mother and I supported my dad as he opened a gourmet Mediterranean restaurant that he named after me, ‘Nazzy’s Hideaway’, and prepared to comfort him after it succumbed to the doomed fate most small businesses encountered. But, it seemed to be gaining popularity quickly and almost a year later business was still booming. Though, now I realized what poor timing my death had, my dad was still trying to settle into the groove of running a restaurant and now the added stress has taken a toll on him.

“Javi! Oh, Javi hurry!” My mother’s shouts had my father scrambling up from his position on the couch. He tossed the half eaten sandwich on the plate and rushed to the backyard. I was close behind, the thudding of my heart seeming to echo off the kitchen walls. The sight before me had me trembling in fear. My mother was struggling to pull a rather ornery Rizzo off a shouting man, an assortment of vegetables scattered around them. The doberman had a hold of his shirt sleeve and was wrenching her head back and forth, the growls ripping from her throat were frighteningly familiar.

“I’m so, sorry! She’s never done this before! I don’t know what’s gotten into her! Javid!” My mom’s screams increased in pitch as Rizzo released the shirt sleeve and lunged for a more meatier part of the man. The subsequent howl of pain that left the man had my dad sprinting for the melee, he grabbed a hold of Rizzo’s collar and with a firm command had the doberman releasing the man from her jaws. He stood up and dusted himself off, and it was then that I realized exactly why Rizzo had attacked the man. I watched in horror as my mother fawned over him to make sure he wasn’t in need of medical attention. I could feel the bile rising in my throat as my dad ushered him into the house.

“Oliver, I’m so incredibly sorry! I don’t know why Riz went after you, she’s usually quite friendly. Are you sure you don’t need to go to the ER?” My father sat him down in one of the stools that were arranged around the island counter. Rizzo was still lunging for the man and my dad stepped out of the room to put her in her crate.

“Oh Oliver, I am so incredibly sorry! Oh, and all of your veggies are most likely ruined! We’ll pay for them of course!” I had to suppress my gag reflex as my mom gave him a firm, apologetic hug.

“No, it’s perfectly alright Mrs. Samedov. It’s really not Rizzo’s fault. I think it might be the mulch I use.” The eerily familiar husky voice had an interesting chime to it. The thin, angular face of the man, who my parents referred to as ‘Oliver’ was pulled into a sheepish grin.

I could only watch helplessly as my parents continued to chat with Oliver, completely oblivious to the fact that they were conversing with my killer. I desperately wanted out of this ‘Twilight Zone’ nightmare. For the first time since I started my second life I desperately wanted to go back to my humdrum life. I longed to live an average life. Before I could bring myself to focus on the scene before me there was a gentle pressure on my skull and the image became blurry before fading to black. I awoke with a shout in the same dank cave surrounded by the Floaters and Cal, Adalet still in front of me, clutching onto my hand for dear life. I withdrew my hand slowly and rose from the uncomfortable floor. Cal took ahold of my arm, and with a wave of thanks toward Adalet he guided me back towards the entrance of the cave.

“Do come back now Nasrin, of course you don’t really have a choice in the matter. They always come back!” The dark chuckle that reverberated off the cave walls sent a torrent of goosebumps down my arms. I had a feeling she was right and I knew that my second life was about to get increasingly difficult before it got any easier.




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Okay I can't remember if I told y'all or not but I wrote a little short tidbit about Drew's previous life and how he died. I won't post the story here because that'll be a bit confusing and an odd break in the storyline buuuut you can read it here.

I'm planning on doing one for each of the other members of the 'main gang'.



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Yay!!



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2015-05-20 07:02:03
omg you get this published you hear?!



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-gives all the hugs-

You guys are so sweet. The fact that some folks are enjoying this is what motivates me to continue writing. <3



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This story is really good. It does read like a novel, it's intriguing and it captivates your attention.



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